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    dots Submission Name: Daydreamsdots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Fantasies filled my everyday's,
    befriending a raging star
    blazing in the horizon:
    rising in the East; resting to the far West,
    when the unknown begins

    In the most solemn hours of dull days,
    questions overwhelm my mind,
    witnessed by a cunning Verdandi;
    forged in numerous rhymes,
    words I could not utter

    written in paper,
    painted with brushes,
    etched in alabaster;
    creating a different person in me,
    casting gold in red embers;
    willing beauty to a bland reality

    Submitted on 2012-08-27 03:04:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Fantasies do fill my days
    as I befriend falling stars
    blazing the night’s horizon
    in the East; rest in the West
    there my unknown will begin.

    My most solemn vows of the day
    as questions overwhelm my mind
    beguiled by one cunning Verdandi
    forged by numerous Norse rhymes
    are words I will not utter but believe.

    Written on paper painted by a brush
    etched to alabaster, hands unknown
    who created another person for me
    casting a gold fleece in red embers
    the willing beauty in a blind reality.

    another very good one.
    | Posted on 2012-08-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It shows how dreams are often more beautiful than reality. It can be so beautiful that there are no words to describe it. I can relate to that since I also spend most of my time daydreaming.

    'willing beauty to a bland reality'
    ~I especially like the last line. It's like you create the beauty that you wish to see in reality in your fantasies.

    good job
    | Posted on 2012-08-29 00:00:00 | by unknownguest | [ Reply to This ]

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