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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: Midnight_Toker
    Elite Ratio:    0.67 - 13/232/500
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    i dont know what you would’ve been, i can only imagine,
    your smile, your laugh, your first word..will NEVER be,
    it perplexes me, clawing beneath my skin, what would’ve happened?
    if you survived? if you wouldnt have died b4 you lived, on’your way 2’me,
    i mourn 4 the part of me that will never be..my child

    Submitted on 2012-08-28 20:29:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know if this is about a miscarriage or an abortion but either way the result is the same. I had a summer lover way back when I was in college. When she got pregnant I suggested we consider getting serious but she said she wasn't ready for any such thing. I wound up taking her to the clinic myself. I hated it but it was her decision to abort. I wasn't ready for marriage myself so it almost seemed like a good decision but it really bothered me. The fetus was only 1 1/2 months old so it went easy but I still wonder who it would have been. This piece really took me back to those feelings. I haven't thought of this in a long time but this piece really speaks the truth. I'm not sure if I liked it or not but there it is!!!

    | Posted on 2012-08-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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