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    dots Submission Name: Deadly delightsdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       bored and eating ice cream haha


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    dotsDeadly delightsdots
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    Ice cream---cold as the lips I once kissed;
    still, undeniably sweet;
    sweet as the candied lies he once uttered
    tempting, unhealthy,
    alluring in its fallacy;
    deliciously deadly.




    Submitted on 2012-08-28 23:49:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ice cream…cold as the lips I once kissed;
    still, undeniably sweet, sweet as candy cane
    once uttered tempted, unhealthy, alluring lies
    their fallacy deadly delicious as phallic symbols.

    very good. poe
    | Posted on 2012-08-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i think i just got one of those whatever they are called, when we eat ice cream too fast...

    can you get it from a kiss?

    perhaps, yes.

    some things can be so bad for us, yet so alluring we cannot resist.


    i'll never eat ice cream again without thinking of this.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-08-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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