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    dots Submission Name: Ever and Alwaysdots

    Author: MmR
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 468/442/138
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsEver and Alwaysdots

    Exhale of ritual mourning sighs
    That embrace the rain from falling eyes
    Ever and always just the same
    As the moon will meet its daily demise..

    And the angels praise Amen!!
    As knees bloody up again
    Ever and always just the same
    Since only the Heaven's do know when..

    Inhale a presence never really there
    That will catch the breath I cannot bear
    Ever and always just the same 
    My soul does ache to show it cares..

    Ever and always just the same
    Ever and always I remain the same..

    Submitted on 2012-08-31 00:14:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I just wanted to comment on your lyrical ear. It's divine. Prehaps
    I should read more of you before I make such a blanket statement. However I did it and it is done! Also I would not listen
    to that other guy You rank way Higher than Emily does in my book.
    | Posted on 2012-09-08 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      okay, way off here i'm sure...but then i feel poetry works if the reader gets a vision, whether it is the same vision the author had, or not.

    i see parallels to emily dickinson here...her battle with belief in God.

    ritual being like a service.

    rain from falling eyes...being the cloudiness of faith for her...the storm of her disbelief and how others shun her because of it. their eyes upon her, waiting for her to stand up and profess...and then their eyes falling away.

    Only the heaven's do know...but emily never did.

    "the presence never there/ ... my soul aches to show it cares/ but ever and always...I remain the same"---a non-believer.

    something i want to grasp but just can't...

    anyway, your poem took me there...

    to my favorite poet.

    | Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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