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    dots Submission Name: A Moment to Foreverdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsA Moment to Foreverdots
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    first gaze held,
    a word away

    one day

    forever -- just
    a kiss away




    Submitted on 2012-08-31 07:55:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You manage in thirteen words
    what most cannot do... at all.

    This was simply perfect.
    It lifts the heart with a single breath.

    Yup.
    Kumusta ka.
    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      I do like the simplistic structure, it felt like a really delicate piece and I think that suits the subject.

    You leave a lot of room for the imagination to create the relationship.

    I Liked this a lot.
    | Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by BevRead | [ Reply to This ]
      a moment before the first glance...then the knowing that there is a connection....then the pondering...will the first kiss to seal the deal ever happen.

    or will it be nothing more than a passing look, and a moving on.

    so many almosts in life.

    with relationships....will either person act or react?

    people so often come close to having their lives touch and sprout love...but how often do they actually touch?

    we so often let it pass us by because of the fear of "commitment/ forevr"

    too bad...because often true happiness was on the verge of lips...

    just would have taken a word or a kiss.
    but instead became a near miss


    nice piece

    jacob

    | Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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