The Solemn Burial by isselman2001

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Submission Name: The Solemn Burial dots

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Author:	isselman2001
Elite Ratio:	5.38 - 37/47/46
Words:	42

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
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The Solemn Burial dots

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We interred our love into the ground
Put a cross Upon the mound
Said good riddance, Love be brave
But our love rose from the grave,
And said in a mocking gibe,
What have you done?
I'm still alive.

Submitted on 2012-08-31 23:04:58 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like the analogy to "Premature Burial"

I'm alive, you're alive, WE are alive...

i like short pieces like this...

typo in title, but otherwise ...yes.

especially like the "gibe"
nice reference to Hamlet..."where are your gibes now?"

jacob
| Posted on 2012-09-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the message here..especially in the last line..for me, love is never really dead..sometimes its just deeply concealed until we are left to believe that it really is gone..you captured that idea here
in love, we should always be brave and never lose hope
| Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the message here..especially in the last line..for me, love is never really dead..sometimes its just deeply concealed until we are left to believe that it really is gone..you captured that idea here
in love, we should always be brave and never lose hope
| Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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