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    dots Submission Name: So lovely is my muse dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSo lovely is my muse dots
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    So lovely is my muse on first rising
    The blush of sleep paints her fair
    Her smile explodes the day
    And sets my tongue to trip hurray

    The flowers in our garden
    Swirling brook and beaver pond
    She with just a glance their way
    And they put their best faces on

    She showers in a blue room
    Beneath a cloud strewn sky
    And with a spiky detonation
    Sun and storm collide




    Submitted on 2012-09-01 14:04:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Love the first two lines, I'm imagining a woman in early morning not well-groomed yet but still her man sees him as the most beautiful. By the way,who's the muse? She is so lucky by the way you described her.

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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