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Ventricles


Author: trinityfinger
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{{honesty

in different dialects
{pearlescent suffused
and windswept

an aurora captured
within a painting}
reeking

of confession}}




Ventricles





To you, what might have been
entwined, these forever nights

buried in what it means to be
whole and true with a child

in your arms; with the caution
of two stars thrown apart

wondering where the other
shines, comforted when asleep

and chasing the art
of deliverance.



To a certain sense of gentle knowing,
you, not more than seven hours distant;

you, whom I chose to weigh down
with endless histrionics, on the edge

of my mind: hungry, searching,
confused, and ultimately unhappy

with my definition
of life.






Submitted on 2012-09-02 09:12:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  don't really find this non-sensical...

i see a family split apart...she with the child, separated from him...and he is full of regrets and always wondering what she is doing...he can't let go of the memories...yet she has started over....existing peacefully and comfortably without him.

he is "unhappy with his definition of life"

because the definition doesn't include her...and he is on the verge of throwing his Webster's in the toilet..with his life.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  this is beautiful, simple, and so relaxing to read
nice!
| Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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