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    dots Submission Name: Ventriclesdots

    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Joke/Depressed
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    in different dialects
    {pearlescent suffused
    and windswept

    an aurora captured
    within a painting}

    of confession}}

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    To you, what might have been
    entwined, these forever nights

    buried in what it means to be
    whole and true with a child

    in your arms; with the caution
    of two stars thrown apart

    wondering where the other
    shines, comforted when asleep

    and chasing the art
    of deliverance.

    To a certain sense of gentle knowing,
    you, not more than seven hours distant;

    you, whom I chose to weigh down
    with endless histrionics, on the edge

    of my mind: hungry, searching,
    confused, and ultimately unhappy

    with my definition
    of life.

    Submitted on 2012-09-02 09:12:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      don't really find this non-sensical...

    i see a family split apart...she with the child, separated from him...and he is full of regrets and always wondering what she is doing...he can't let go of the memories...yet she has started over....existing peacefully and comfortably without him.

    he is "unhappy with his definition of life"

    because the definition doesn't include her...and he is on the verge of throwing his Webster's in the toilet..with his life.

    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beautiful, simple, and so relaxing to read
    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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