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    dots Submission Name: korudots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotskorudots
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    synchronicity
    between endless rain
    and the curve of your
    voice

    i
    will forget
    all of this tomorrow
    being monday
    and a stony deliverance
    of impromptu games
    and handshakes given
    when there is only
    emptiness
    on my part

    only
    being an invention
    of half-formed notes
    and crescent moons
    i've stumbled under
    here in winter fog
    and searchlights
    tracing sand
    and fingers
    rippling
    over flax

    halos crushed
    between this day
    and the next

    wind and denial
    a futile breath

    stones shiver
    and blue
    becomes
    brown




    Submitted on 2012-09-02 09:36:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      and this probably is the lamest comment ever...because emwren basically said exactly what i was feeling when i read this...

    so ditto her comment

    and you have mine.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      There are many lines in this poem that stoke the fire of my imagination and make me want to go write right now.

    ...endless rain
    and the curve of your voice

    Is just a fantastic way to open, but it really only gets better bit by bit

    the formatting is quite nice also, it kind of looks like a side view of someone lying curved on a bed or couch...lovely poem.
    | Posted on 2012-09-05 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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