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    dots Submission Name: Whispering Moon dots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWhispering Moon dots

                   Watch the warm as it fades to fog
                   Sleek as shadow ghosts at play
                   Do your eyes filter the fantasy
                   Can you hear sweet fairy songs

                   The shades of love are languid coos
                   maddened kisses with fluid caress
                   Tonight the moon is slick with cloud
                   Phantom flowers fractalate the sky

                   Somewhere she lies sleeping
                   And I
                   Am a sad poet whose arch nemesis
                   is sleep

    Submitted on 2012-09-02 22:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the song "talking to the moon" and this one too. this was just fancy Dale. there is just softness on this piece. great read and thanks for sharing..

    | Posted on 2012-09-03 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      This as with the other I just read seems to be a bit different style from much of that which I've seen from you in the past. A different mood, softer and speaking of a more human kind of love yet still celestrial and fanticiful in flavor. Quite a nice read.
    | Posted on 2012-09-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2012-09-03 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, somewhere she's lies sleeping.. Completely fine and oblivious to the fact that you are not. It reminds me of a song.. Talking To The Moon.. No similarity in the words, just the feel.
    I stay awake at night praying that just once you're thinking of me too... I told another writer just today that desire usually leaves no survivors... Must be in the air these days.

    Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      i see the transformation of day to night in this and the beauty in the process..how it brings about peace and mythical creatures appear from hiding to lavish in the mystery and beauty of night..how they celebrate it with people unaware..i also imagine someone who can't find be at ease despite the peace that night brings yearning to feel the warmth on the bed beside his wife and yet sleep keeps evading him
    just my interpretation about it

    | Posted on 2012-09-02 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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