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    dots Submission Name: 'round and 'rounddots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Does sadness like love flow
    To hush the sorrow of a soul
    Time makes antiques of our past
    Death pulls apart lovers at the last
    Me I seek nothing more profound
    Than a child spinning 'round and 'round.
    O let me live probability's lie
    pass me through the needle's eye
    Or a philter of divine deep
    That once more I may harvest sleep




    Submitted on 2012-09-02 23:57:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this has a kind of simple sadness and soothing rhythm that is appealing, although I don't know why sadness should be appealing, it's actually the poem that is,
    I like the idea of harvesting sleep.

    probability's
    needle's

    I like this one
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      So you want sex dreams with girls who really don't know who you are, you direct the antiques of their visage and form to make wanton love as you relish teaching them the true fecundity of your affections. Believe me I've had many salacious visions of myself in the girls locker room......all lies. Oh well, to be the worst of it who knows what astral projections our dreams imply. I may be an octopus but I try to keep my tentacles well in hand. Reaching through vast distances to pander their phallic value or perhaps enjoy their exserted protuberance could get them cut off. Imagine that an inadvertently bridged day dream could get you emasculated or worse killed. They will chase you down, track you like a dog, there'll be no escape, it's enough to give you nightmares. Hum, guilty, guilty, guilty, what ever shall I do? Lost forever in the quandaries of the psychic quagmire, I better clean up my act!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-09-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice and reminiscent of the Sufi whirling dervishes, or at least that would seem to be their goal also.
    | Posted on 2012-09-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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