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    dots Submission Name: Beauty's Imperfectiondots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBeauty's Imperfectiondots
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    It was a beautiful shadow
    Burning the grass in her liking
    But I refuse to let go
    Despite its smile of lightning

    The dark parasite so suffocating
    It grabs and tries and pull her in
    And my strength has started fading
    But my grip cannot give

    For our bond is forever strong
    The strongest adhesives, ever so envious
    So if we cannot chase it off
    Together we'll be lost

    But this battle is not mine
    My efforts remain useless
    Your light has to shine
    And it'll lie to rest

    But a catch awaits
    It will surely return
    If that light fades
    So make sure that torch burns




    Submitted on 2012-09-06 14:36:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow I am totally lost it this poetry's imperfection! My efforts at
    mendacity are eluded. The truth will out, beauty is declared
    flawed, postulate is proven. I am so cultivated with impressions
    and I do so agree the Torch must burn!
    | Posted on 2012-09-07 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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