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Author:	BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:	22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:	1.8 - 23/161/138
Words:	112

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Beauty's Imperfection dots

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It was a beautiful shadow
Burning the grass in her liking
But I refuse to let go
Despite its smile of lightning

The dark parasite so suffocating
It grabs and tries and pull her in
And my strength has started fading
But my grip cannot give

For our bond is forever strong
The strongest adhesives, ever so envious
So if we cannot chase it off
Together we'll be lost

But this battle is not mine
My efforts remain useless
Your light has to shine
And it'll lie to rest

But a catch awaits
It will surely return
If that light fades
So make sure that torch burns

Submitted on 2012-09-06 14:36:52 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wow I am totally lost it this poetry's imperfection! My efforts at
mendacity are eluded. The truth will out, beauty is declared
flawed, postulate is proven. I am so cultivated with impressions
and I do so agree the Torch must burn!

| Posted on 2012-09-07 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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It means a lot to them, as it does to you.