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Author: Rainwater
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Feeling dissociated is an odd sensation that's not easily described.


I am choking
I am floating
And watching a movie of someone else's life
Through someone else's eyes

Submitted on 2012-09-06 22:11:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  sounds like sheryl crow..."i'm a stranger in my own life"---

sometimes it is how we feel...outside looking in at ourselves.

we don't belong...anywhere, not even in our own thoughts.

| Posted on 2012-09-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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