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    dots Submission Name: Yellow Wood Wordsdots

    Author: simpleandgreen
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    Is it possible to put the beauty of autumn in a humble form of prose? These words cannot ever describe the simplicity of the maturing year; my adoration grows immensly as the days float on one by one. How do I explain how it opens my eyes, stirs my soul, and fuses my passion. My attempts do the reality no justice, yet I still attempt. It is my way of not letting the sights and smells slip through my fingers. I will compare the air to a fresh market apple, so sweet, light and crisp. I will use banal adjectives like brown and orange; however they trigger the memories of raking heaps of golden rod, fiery red, an unusual light-orange-yellow, and burnt sienna. So maybe my words are not to paint a picture, but to trigger memories before they fade into nothing. In the end, when autumns gone, these words get me through the other three. It is just a thought...

    Submitted on 2012-09-08 23:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its beautiful

    i think the only correction i can make is: 'autumns'
    should be 'autumn is'

    for me, the message is clear and well portrayed and wonderful use of words
    | Posted on 2012-09-09 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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