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    dots Submission Name: The Moon of Solitudedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Moon of Solitudedots
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    A blood-drenched moon is rising
    on a tide of crimson dreams.
    The lonesome voice of solitude
    is sobbing while it sings.

    Peeling cracks of thunder
    dismembered bones
    bursting in hammered air
    are only part of this corrupt cast
    of caricatures.

    A dirge of corruption,
    drifts out of noxious abyss
    it comes as a scent
    of
    mockery and red madness.

    Shivers wafting up from
    beyond the gates of oblivion
    are a molestation from
    Satan's darkest crypt.

    Brooding titans stir in restless slumber
    in the throes of nightmare
    they
    begin to grumble
    in a monstrous muttering,
    hideous, rumbling growl.

    A throbbing pulse pounds
    a demonic slavering demon
    longs for fresh meat.
    This is the grotesqueness of
    charnel.
    It reverberates to rend
    the tender skin of midnight's
    slaves.

    Quiver in revulsion
    surcease must be found.
    There is no escape
    from Fate.
    The kiss of sultry serpent lips.
    is the dark release of death.

    An onslaught of scorpions and fire,
    ignites passion’s embers into flame.
    Tremble at his name.

    Burn in sulfuric torrent
    of overwhelming heat.

    A heat of want and longing
    that chars an already desolate plain.

    Where lost lover’s hearts wander.
    The scorpions have sting enough
    for all who fall.

    Until the last
    drop of blood
    from sorrow drips
    and spatters,

    splatters

    doom

    Aroused to bestial rage
    the shroud
    wraps ‘round
    shrieks
    cackle
    it begins.

    a wailing wasteland of forever,

    until it reappears—
    the bloody moon of solitude.




    Submitted on 2012-09-09 01:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow great imagery here, you have this magic. I love the 7th stanza but I would have changed it too "sweet release of death" just a my thought. For me solitude is worse than death. I hope that bloody moon wont reappear again.
    This was great Dale..
    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-11 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      And here we are again, meeting at the moon. Even in a blood red state of solitude, I am a sucker for its loveliness.

    I can't even tell you how much I love the beginning..

    A blood drenched moon is rising
    On a tide of crimson dreams.
    The lonesome voice of solitude
    Is sobbing while it sings.

    It seems as though this dream was a nightmare in disguise..
    | Posted on 2012-09-10 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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