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    dots Submission Name: Unto Death of Sundots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsUnto Death of Sundots

                   Golden sun halo hammered
                   spouts her blood
                   forced to fume and fall.
                   Interred now 'neath ashen hill.

                   What heart-of-night
                   does not relish her demise
                   the release of fiend-desire.
                   The priest who comes
                   bearing crimson chains…

                   honeysuckle nails carve
                   -delicate lace-
                   on milky skin…
                   cinnamon trails.
                   brand flesh-
                   tongues run amok
                   in a twilight shaken hour.

                   Those who taste
                   the decay of his lips-
                   as he lingers to brush aside
                   a wisp of sordid hair-
                   from innocent eyes (Ha!)

                   perish beneath a pile of corpses...

                   Dignified maybe not,
                   but in reverence...
                   pardoned by fleeting breath-
                   rationalized to deceive the willing...
                   So unwillingly provoked-


                   to join the winged-night
                   and flit through trellised arbor.

                   A macabre dance

                   Thriving on mute pulses-
                   hearts beat low out of tune.

                   All the more pleasing
                   for shadow is scarce
                   in this waste-

                   Reveling as orchid is suffused
                   by nightshade’s fragrant toxin.
                   Fantasies chosen for deadly allure
                   a conspiracy
                   to delight paramour.

                   Weave to ever weave
                   lost in shadow capers-
                   torment vanquished freely...
                   in their lingering calamity.

                   in chambered travesty…
                   darkness so becomes you
                   Heresy in pleasured mutterings
                   -hidden beneath the fallen dusk-

                   The night brood lies-
                   Bonded on sanguine sheets

                   inflicting adrenaline into her fantasy…
                   wreaking infection with virulent hands…

                   Smeared red with bloom-
                   -of sacrifice-
                   bewitching the moon
                   to rein eternal over this land
                   of ethereal-midnight.

                   their harmonic screeches echo…
                   infinite is their lust.

                   Stoked to quiver side by side
                   ’till spawned from black contentment,
                   glutted with sacred scarlet…


                   climatic piercing…
                   whimpered plea…
                   the void trembles and the dark
                   seethes, sparks alone light the scene.
                   The world explodes in flame.

                   Transformation in his caress
                   strives to seek vengeance-
                   Floating now in the air eyes ablaze
                   fury grips her spindly form.

                   peel back, she is ready
                   to join the hunt.

    Submitted on 2012-09-09 01:59:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know how you write these long things, I would have run out of steam less than half way down the page...
    | Posted on 2012-10-23 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes... this is the classic stuff of DaleP. Tell me what you don't know of psychography whilst I submit a spirit guides your own hand in such. Oh, but perhaps my own imagination only tells me this to enrichen this otherwise mundane existence. Nice twist with the him/her plays.

    | Posted on 2012-09-10 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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