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    dots Submission Name: Carved Memorydots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Nature
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    Description:
       I was attending Mass early morning and this scene caught my eye..there was a blue moon the night before and that day I saw the blue moon meet the rising sun..the moon just stayed there while the sun kept rising..i was distracted by it for the duration of the Mass..it was my first time to see a 'blue moon' and also my first time to witness this kind of scene..i was amazed :)


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    dotsCarved Memorydots
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    Fragility invaded;
    the mind and heart
    when a blue moon blends,
    with the night and stars

    At a tranquil state,
    on a weary morn;
    that blue moon met,
    the shining dawn

    a fleeting meeting of great power
    during Mass, their beauty towered;
    a scene once sought,
    my memory caught

    an hour good for forever




    Submitted on 2012-09-09 22:38:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      and it could make you think it was God intended to be at that particular moment...

    it is like when two people meet...and it is destiny or serendipity....

    everything falls into place in a rare but precious coincidence...as the blue moon and the sun colliding in the sky.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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