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    dots Submission Name: Gone so suddenlydots
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    Author: TalentedChild
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 19/81/106
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       like 4 weeks or so a go I lost my mom due to an allergic reaction to bee stings. I am 21. My sister is 16. She was a single mom, and it was just the three of us in one home. We were both out at the time, and came home to find out she didn't make it. I had warned her before I left to be careful of bees because I got stung twice. However, no matter the warning, she still passed on. I have to somehow believe it was for a reason, to help me through this. I hope that anyone that's experiencing loss finds the comfort in Jesus Christ, and close relatives to help them through it too. It's not easy really, and how I may heal I am still trying to figure out.


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    dotsGone so suddenlydots
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    Tears sting my face, as I finally let out a cry
    I guess I just wish I had the chance to say goodbye.

    Hours pass by, and I wish you knew, just how much I really did love you.

    How did I know you were going to go away so soon & to a place I couldnít go?
    How did I know Iíd be left without you, feeling so alone?


    This is my first birthday without the sound of your voice, your laugh, or your smile
    I wish I could spend one more day with you, even if itís just for a little while.

    I want to share more stories with you about work after a long day, or about the cute things my boyfriend had to say.
    I know I canít hear you, but I just want you to know,
    That I love you so much mom, and Iíll never let you go.




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      Thanks for making readers a part of your life and emotions by this touching piece.

    "From God we came and to Him we shall return."

    Death is inevitable and for the ones we have lost and lose, we can but pray.

    Always keep her in your prayers and thoughts and remember the best of things about her.

    Your write-up indeed does make one realize the importance of loved one and how much we really depend on them, knowingly or unknowingly.
    | Posted on 2012-09-17 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry for your mom. but wherever she is right now she'll be very happy because you made such a wonderful poem for her. this was really full of emotions. thank you for sharing this and it will remind us how precious every moment in our lives.
    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by orangesunset | [ Reply to This ]


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