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    dots Submission Name: Bleakdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    days pass with hopes in vain,
    confusions pouring heavy as rain;
    amidst all this my love keeps growing,
    I wait, wait with silent heart beating

    but then the fog thickens as I reach out to you,
    the darkness engulfs me;
    heavy rain pours as never before,
    adding to the coldness of my soul

    I see nothing, I feel nothing
    I lay down heartbroken --- forever still




    Submitted on 2012-09-10 09:14:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh... how much I do relate to this. I wish I didn't know such tragedy, but I know darkness all too well.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      You are so heartbroken in this one!
    It reminds me of poor Juliet
    when she thought she had lost
    her Romeo.
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it amazing how we give another so much power over us? It's easy to let all happiness slip away because of the actions of another. I'm slowly learning myself that I.. ME.. I can make myself happy. I am the the best person to put such investment into. I deserve to be happy and it's time to allow myself to be.. With or without "you".

    I hope that in the thickening fog, you someday reach out to yourself and not the one who put you here.
    | Posted on 2012-09-12 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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