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    dots Submission Name: My Mourning Moondots
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    Author: MmR
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    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Oh my mourning moon,
    I wish I could give to you
    what you have always given me.


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    dotsMy Mourning Moondots
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    Oh, my mourning moon
    Glory be the shimmer of thine eyes
    That give away their offering
    To your comforting skies.
    Illuminate my dedication
    As I whisper unto you my sorrow
    May you ease me with your loveliness
    From the trials of the morrow.

    Oh, my lovely mourning moon.










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      a mourning moon is a bad moon to look upon. i guess when it's always up there in the sky it can be comforting. familiar grief. i think i know what this one is about. either that or you know a mourning poet about. but in all honesty it feels more like you're mourning to me. clever use of the word. i hope you step out of the blue light soon, sarah bear.
    | Posted on 2013-01-14 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      I come now to worship in tower of
    Babel high so high above the
    Blighted land.
    Babbling now I mutter-croon
    To light of moon
    Are you there to hear my prayers ?
    Lift me now by ray of light
    As to you my soul takes flight
    For far- before the ‘morrow
    I intend to join
    With yours my sorrow
    My lovely
    My mourning moon

    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      i often wish we could give back to nature or the sun or the moon or stars...think of how much peace and contentment they bring us...just with us looking at them.

    i like the play on mourning moon....there is often still a moon in the morning...but yes, mourning...it is like that beautiful white round thing is mourning our sorrows...feeling for us.

    like an eye of god.

    nice write

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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