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    dots Submission Name: Masks; under constructiondots
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    Author: irrelevantme
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    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsMasks; under constructiondots
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    Dancing upon edges of a broken window
    Seeing through the smoke
    Silhouttes of undiscovered dreams
    Born and hid, layer by layer

    Upon the fear and doubt
    I choke
    Covered with falling debris




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      Dancing upon edges of a broken window
    Seeing through the smoke
    Silhouettes of undiscovered dreams
    Born and hid, layer by layer

    Upon the fear and doubt
    I choke
    Covered with falling debris
    Debris that now serves only
    As a marker
    A remembrance of some dim life
    I no longer know

    The blister of years long burst
    Behind me
    O those glory years
    Of my wild youth defiled

    Some dim life I no longer
    Know yet vaguely I half-remember
    Hoar-frost in autumn
    And sharp blue crystal sky

    There was a women I will
    Never forget Her
    Now were Her eyes blue or green
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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