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My sister

Author: blackdemigod13
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My sister

I've worried about you all day and night
Thinking about how this doesn't feel right.
You're so little and you don't know what's wrong
You won't know why we're all gone.
A week there will seem like an eternity here
I will pray that God keeps you safe my dear.
Just remember what they say
And meditate on this everyday:
Love wins in the end
I will always be here for you my sister, my friend.

Submitted on 2012-09-13 09:02:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow this is so sweet..I'm an only child so I've gotten used to loneliness and I never felt the love of a sibling before but if I had, I'd want to him/her to care for me as much as the care portrayed here in your poem..nice:)
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