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    dots Submission Name: My sisterdots
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    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy sisterdots
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    I've worried about you all day and night
    Thinking about how this doesn't feel right.
    You're so little and you don't know what's wrong
    You won't know why we're all gone.
    A week there will seem like an eternity here
    I will pray that God keeps you safe my dear.
    Just remember what they say
    And meditate on this everyday:
    Love wins in the end
    I will always be here for you my sister, my friend.




    Submitted on 2012-09-13 09:02:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is so sweet..I'm an only child so I've gotten used to loneliness and I never felt the love of a sibling before but if I had, I'd want to him/her to care for me as much as the care portrayed here in your poem..nice:)
    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]


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