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    dots Submission Name: Bright Tuesdaysdots

    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBright Tuesdaysdots

    Im happy because there is a life out there that is mine.

    I smile because I can feel it tingling,
    calling me out towards the world.

    Sometimes I feel like Im dying to burst, unable to hold on to this bleak present.

    With melancholy I cuddle with this life knowing that it wont last.

    I've said my goodbyes and
    I've prepared this self for a sunnier future, one with silent bright tuesdays,
    and orange evenings,
    bold in color and passionate in textures.

    I feel my future life hurdling towards my present one and the excitement of the collision wakes my every sense.

    I smile because I know,
    that the future of my self is near,
    teasing and allowing glimpses
    just enough to send another wave of knee- buckling arosal through me.

    I smile not because I love today
    but because I am in love
    with the future days to come

    I smile because I know

    Submitted on 2012-09-13 18:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hm although that I can relate to parts of this I think the language used is too simple. To make good poetry imo you need to crush ideas and make words explode. Don't try to describe anything, just throw it on the paper, like dirty rags against a wall. Dunno if that makes sense to you but yeah...
    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      It's not too common to read a positive outlook on this site. I'm as guilty as the next depressive that fails to see the forest for the trees. It made me smile to know there is still hope and excitement for the future even while knowing the present isn't so hot at the moment.

    Keep smiling... It makes me smile
    | Posted on 2012-09-13 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

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