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    dots Submission Name: Haiku nidots

    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHaiku nidots

    she wears that white dress
    like a first sign of winter
    snow on aroused skin

    Submitted on 2012-09-14 21:38:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      pretty images
    | Posted on 2012-11-11 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Found snow in u. But for me snow still is an enigma. Anyways, I admire haiku since I don't have a clue how they so beautifully come into being.
    | Posted on 2012-10-08 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]
      A blushing bride strolls
    down the centre aisle amidst
    many friendly smiles.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      I DIG this piece, makes me want to get to the skin underneath the dress. You leave it so dangly like here is this powerful image of a white dress,
    the adjetive "Aroused" well, is arousing.
    | Posted on 2012-09-28 00:00:00 | by BevRead | [ Reply to This ]
      she wore a white dress
    as the first sign of winter
    aroused her kin to nature

    to be or not to be?
    | Posted on 2012-09-20 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This one made me smile really. There's so much said here and the picture was so clear. I'm thinking of a woman trying to be pretty and reserved, while shimmering with a white dress of course. Like what Jacob said innocence, or what it appears to be. She's hiding something or I guess trying to pretend to be someone else or maybe trying to be in character.;-)
    And between the dress and her skin is someone holding back, resisting but can't contain passion and heat. She's about to burst with emotions and willing to give it all. A very passionate woman indeed.
    This was amazing..

    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      not so innocent eh?

    used to mean purity, now, not so. many brides who wear white have had experience.

    i like "aroused skin"

    it is like a late snow in early spring....the fresh, sprouting grass, flowers etc, destroyed by that unexpected snow...

    also i see the juxtaposition of cold against heat...which is quite interesting in this piece.

    either just below the surface is someone with intense passion, who never shows it.

    or---passion hidden with coldness...the snowy demeanor a lie?

    amazing how much can be said in so few words.

    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      It's called dandruff, silly.
    | Posted on 2012-09-14 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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