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    dots Submission Name: Lost in Love Landdots

    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       Caught in the net of temporary love does things to a young soul.

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    dotsLost in Love Landdots

    There is something beautiful about young love.
    The way they disregard the present,
    Or the inevitable future.
    Gazing into each otherís eyes,
    Getting lost in a different world.
    In a concrete jungle,
    They hide behind trees,
    Melt through creeks,
    Sprint through forests,
    Sleep in grassy meadows.
    In a place where buildings
    Block out the serene sky
    They stare at the clouds and the stars.
    The comets and the moon.
    The birds and the golden light.
    In a street of pushy people,
    And shouting cabs.
    They are all alone.
    Lost in Love Land.

    Submitted on 2012-09-15 10:00:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What I get from this is that you are not talking about temporary love when writing this. I think that maybe instead of talking about the abstract idea of love, you talk about love in the form of a person, therefore young love= temporary love, since young love seems so strong until the future catches up to them. The love for each other would be eternal and never fading, but they just might physically fade. This is a beautiful, I could really capture your message. Nice one.
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by johnbegone92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Juvenile love, I think there's such thing because we are capable of loving at any age. But I would not consider it as the purest sense of the word love actually, you see how can two very young, dependent,immature people handle such responsibility? loving for me is a something hard to do, and only those willing to tackle and commit can truly love. That's why young love end up in confusion,unwanted pregnancy and force marriages.

    but temporary love is just sad. What I love about this poem is you have actually captured the idea. And I remember my young self really,reckless and free.

    I like this one,

    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      The is no such thing as temporary love. If you analyze it you'll find out that in most cases it's nothing more than physical attraction. Love is eternal, it takes time for it to settle and time for it to evolve towards hatred or towards death. Those are the only two ways love ever ends. Still it's a decent poem I think what you are trying to capture here is youth itself rather than love...
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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