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    dots Submission Name: Pinkdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    As I lie entombed in sleep
    I dream of things forbidden
    Pink and pouty
    Soft, moistly glistening
    Sweetly lisping of love

    All around me this pink chaos lies
    Please paint me into bedlam before I crystallize
    Lipstick lighting ignites from moon on high
    O' call it what you will
    Of Pink plump inviting
    I will never get my fill

    I see the wicked shimmer of pink-
    Candy kisses floating in a loverís sky
    When black suggestion by hypnosis calls
    It is by pink chains I am held thrall

    A vision of a pink coral sea
    She is there
    In fragrant tropic air
    She beats
    The pulsing drum
    Pink thrum- pink thrum- pink thrum
    The lady comes
    Wearing only pink lipstick
    She comes




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      Quite rich but I'm feeling a bit over pink'd if I'm to be at all critical or helpful here. There might be a case to dance around "pink" on occasion so as to not let it become trite. Quite smooth though, like you would expect pink to be.
    | Posted on 2012-09-19 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      You're a genius Dale, this one is totally amazing. You pulled this off really well.

    "It is by pink chains I am held entrall" my favorite line.
    A little bit provoking on the ending but I like it.

    Nice;-)

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      So you got the succubi I sent you or at least added them to your collection. I remind you it can be difficult to chew this brand of bubblegum and walk at the same time. Oh. I know, if you haven't seen them all you haven't seen enough but shades of Pygmalion, there's a myriad plethora of these images to be found. Your left nut, the thought of such prospectus. Ah yes the lecherous libido liaison of my lothario lout, I truly would like to think. I liked this hot pink so well, I could truly be obtusely overt and obscene but as I mentioned of my octopus perhaps this is not pragmatically practical, liberating exigence though it might appear.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-09-15 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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