Hey you, yes, you!

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Hey you, yes, you!

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Hey you, yes, you! : My melancholy is my own So don’t you dare claim it, come here like a seasoned thief, squint at the scattered keyholes and leave, full of yourself and unwont prejudice.

Submitted on 2012-09-16 07:52:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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this reminds me of when people say..."i know how you feel" no, you don't know how i feel...only i know how i feel..i own that, no one else. might have used "squint through scattered keyholes" but this has strong attitude and terse verse. jacob

| Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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