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Submission Name: Hey you, yes, you! dots

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Author:	expiring_touch
ASL Info:	30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:	4.03 - 137/243/158
Words:	37

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Hey you, yes, you! dots

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Hey you, yes, you! :
My melancholy is my own
So don’t you dare claim it, come here
like a seasoned thief, squint at
the scattered keyholes
and leave, full of yourself
and unwont
prejudice.

Submitted on 2012-09-16 07:52:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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this reminds me of when people say..."i know how you feel"

no, you don't know how i feel...only i know how i feel..i own that, no one else.

might have used "squint through scattered keyholes"

but this has strong attitude and terse verse.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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