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    dots Submission Name: Hey you, yes, you!dots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHey you, yes, you!dots
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    Hey you, yes, you! :
    My melancholy is my own
    So donít you dare claim it, come here
    like a seasoned thief, squint at
    the scattered keyholes
    and leave, full of yourself
    and unwont
    prejudice.




    Submitted on 2012-09-16 07:52:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of when people say..."i know how you feel"

    no, you don't know how i feel...only i know how i feel..i own that, no one else.

    might have used "squint through scattered keyholes"

    but this has strong attitude and terse verse.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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