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    dots Submission Name: To Love and Be Freedots

    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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       ugh..this is just some stupid me thing..i just want to burst but i can't..it's wrong and i need to forget about these feelings and move on

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    dotsTo Love and Be Freedots

    Unseen memories
    Of an empty past
    Haunts me
    In thoughts
    In dreams
    A vague picture
    Of nonexistent colors and shapes
    Too abstract to be understood

    longing . . .

    Mutual understandings
    Can never be displayed
    Bound by vows
    So sweetly sworn
    In a barred past
    Witnessed by flowers and crowds

    unchangeable . . .

    If lifetimes were just
    A touch away
    I would caress every surface
    And grasp these empty spaces
    To reach that world
    Where what wasn’t
    Will be
    Where we can love
    And you are free

    Submitted on 2012-09-18 09:58:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't know about the me thing but
    I find this so interesting.
    It is like someone wants
    a morally unattainable something yes?
    a barred past witnessed by flowers and
    crowds (kewl)

    The tone makes me sad.
    However this is so well written
    I kind of like being sad for awhile.
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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