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    dots Submission Name: Music Loverdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I love music !!! :P


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    dotsMusic Loverdots
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    She sang a song
    With tone deaf ears

    Created a masterpiece
    Passing through every parting of the lips

    One word slowly changing a heart

    Burning the living
    Rising the dead

    Fulfilling forbidden love
    In every possibilty,

    She sang






    Submitted on 2012-09-21 03:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This sounds like turnabout!
    Forbidden love? I am so
    envious what have you done?

    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a musician (guitar player) and a singer, though you might expect me to be prejudiced against tone deaf singers I am also a martial artist and I can primal scream appreciate sounds from the soul. I particularly appreciated your second verse. As strange as it might occur to you I can obstinate expressiveness really relate to that on the depthfully pervasive factor. I had a little bit of trouble with the fourth verse : "burning the living", until I thought, we are all like candles that enjoy to be lit. So we raise the dead : boy there are a lot of metaphysical discrepancies to be found there, not all of us where good. Nonetheless that doesn't mean we can't understand what caused these discrepancies and offer them the possibility of redemption. Excuse me I wax philosophical, Sing on!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-09-21 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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