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    dots Submission Name: fangsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsfangsdots
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    How wicked are your wittle fangs
    as they whisper hello from the
    hollow below my itty chin?
    You have no need
    for web to bind me.
    I could never flee so sweet
    a vise.
    O my am I being milked or drained?
    This is not leading into subjection
    or is it?
    As
    You bury me in rhythmic hours of half gasped
    scream
    and
    all
    my
    strength, is stabbed away.





    Submitted on 2012-09-22 01:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, sweet submission..being free in pain..in the arms of somewhat a sadistic lover..slowly dying in love
    Like this:)
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
      Macabre fun.
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "All my strenght is stabbed away" this is definitely leading to subjection Dale. I like the format of this,those one word lines make intervals which suits the flow well.

    She must be a sweet killer..
    I really enjoyed this,

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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