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    dots Submission Name: fangsdots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    How wicked are your wittle fangs
    as they whisper hello from the
    hollow below my itty chin?
    You have no need
    for web to bind me.
    I could never flee so sweet
    a vise.
    O my am I being milked or drained?
    This is not leading into subjection
    or is it?
    You bury me in rhythmic hours of half gasped
    strength, is stabbed away.

    Submitted on 2012-09-22 01:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, sweet submission..being free in pain..in the arms of somewhat a sadistic lover..slowly dying in love
    Like this:)
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]
      Macabre fun.
    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "All my strenght is stabbed away" this is definitely leading to subjection Dale. I like the format of this,those one word lines make intervals which suits the flow well.

    She must be a sweet killer..
    I really enjoyed this,

    | Posted on 2012-09-22 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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