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    dots Submission Name: The Stained Uniformdots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    ASL Info:    21/trans/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 167/158/74
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Stained Uniformdots
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    There's still a canvas sheet over the empty window
    the AC unit is broken
    then there's that uniform
    with the stain that needs to be taken out.
    'When are you going to do that?' you think.
    It won't be tomorrow, that's for sure.

    You rift through your duffel bag
    chemical suit, a necklace
    a card you picked up at the PX.

    You wonder if she'll like it
    and
    will she remember you when you're gone
    but mostly
    will you come home at all?

    You shoulder your heavy rucksack
    steel-framed
    and open the door
    your footsteps the sound of combat boots
    on cement.

    The leaves whirl overhead like ghosts
    casting faint shadows on the ground
    the wind whispers through the ephemeral grass
    the sun is shining brightly, for how long?
    The sky is a deep blue.

    You get in the car.
    The plane is waiting for you.
    So is she.

    You say goodbye
    The car engine starts
    the plane takes off.
    You look out the window.




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      when I read this I remember the movie "Dear Jhon". On how the guy went to war and the girl waited for a long time. I like how sadness is implicitly portrayed in this one. This was just wonderful. I really like this.
    | Posted on 2012-10-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Duty calls too often accompanied by hardships and sorrows.
    | Posted on 2012-09-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, the sun is shining brightly but for how long..when will the next cloud of war cause a dark shadow to hide the peace.

    i like this snippet...also the idea of the stain, the uniform, the taped up window, the AC not working....

    the poor soldier...fighting for our country and coming back to the poverty he and his significant other own...

    makes me think of the unemployment rate now among veterans...so high at 30 percent..it is appalling.

    this piece is quite descriptive..a story poem that creates a scene and etches into our minds...

    a sadness.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Seriously what can we do with that horrible stain. It's been so for the minions of war since time immemorial. I don't think Tide or Gain will ever wash it out. Maybe a worldwide de'tente replete with a pervasive seance. We can only hope!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-09-23 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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