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    dots Submission Name: early frost.dots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsearly frost.dots
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    greatest societal malady
    living animals
    consuming, breathing
    survival, surviving
    after the dream diesó
    did death give to the
    dream that lives
    in the soul surviving
    mistaken letters for vowels
    unformed, unfinished
    whited, blanked out
    for what hope
    completed, fulfilled
    what after?




    Submitted on 2012-09-23 21:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what a question and makes me ponder here. this makes a lot of sense the other ones I read. this is great
    | Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]


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