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I Am So Dead!


Author: irrelevantme
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Class/Type: Misc /Angst
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this was written when I was still about 14 or 15 so it's a bit childish..I was just scared of how my mom would react when I told her that I lost the money she gave and my phone..childish, i know!


I Am So Dead!


an average morning
befell an average girl
with average skin
and average curls

yet on that most average of days
her world turned
her world swayed

a hand inside her pocket vest
found nothing in its morning quest
upon her way to school
no pocket, no hanky, no key, no phone!
this, mommy will not condone

oh how I fear the end of this average day
I hope mom's mood is sunny as May




Submitted on 2012-09-23 22:57:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your words are so beautiful. I can feel your anguish.

| Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by mimis043 | [ Reply to This ]
  So what happened? I was left hanging here, well,just hope her mood is as sunny as you hoped it to be. Its nice to see at 13 your writing like this, very real and practical not something out of the moon. I miss this type of pieces.
Poetry can be so random, and I like how it reminds me of ny childhood. I lost my money before too;-) however, it taught me how to be responsible, to check on things.
Thanks for sharing,

Jen
| Posted on 2012-09-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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