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    dots Submission Name: Under That Smiledots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsUnder That Smiledots
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    Who could have known
    That under that smile
    She had a problem
    Throat thick with bile.
    Who could have know
    That under those tops
    Were bright red scars
    Skin plagued with marks.
    Who could have known
    That this sweet girl
    Had a horrible past
    Lived in a different world.
    Who could have known
    This lover of life
    Would lay in her garden
    And end it all with a knife.
    She came to her limit
    Its so sad
    How people succumb to
    The devils that drive them mad.




    Submitted on 2012-09-24 01:19:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There was a girl on this site, her monicker was mistykidd. I believe she suffered exactly fate. I was bummed having tried to befriend her and give her support, that it did no good. I imagine there are a lot of psychiatrists with similar feelings about one or two of their patients. She never said so in so many words but I think she was molested by her stepdad. This post rings true. It's such a tragedy that so many people die this way.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-09-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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