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    dots Submission Name: Hearts In Lovedots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 943
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       wrote this about my girl


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    dotsHearts In Lovedots
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    When I close,
    My eyes at night,
    You are there,
    And everything's right.

    Hand in hand,
    Your head on my chest,
    Giving each other,
    The love we know best.

    Feeling your skin,
    Against my own,
    Breathing in sync,
    Like we are one.

    I fear the morning,
    I don't want it to end,
    Although soon,
    I'll be there again.

    You and me,
    Make a perfect pair,
    People get jealous,
    They say its not fair.

    They wish they had,
    The things we do,
    They wish they could love,
    The way I love you.




    Submitted on 2012-09-24 21:35:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this so full of joy
    and well done
    I could feel the love
    and very original
    | Posted on 2012-09-26 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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