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    dots Submission Name: one held photographdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsone held photographdots
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    hands like winter drops
    forced to cigarettes,
    changes along corners
    of summer fleet.

    clutter feelings,
    plain white fears
    to frost on skin


    the cold birds fling themselves to catch a yellow leaf on the verge of falling,

    I saw you,

    a burn of the sun.




    Submitted on 2012-09-25 00:18:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is like a snapshot of fall...what's leaving, what's coming, cold upon hot...like pouring cold water on hot grease.

    the white fears frosting on skin...there is something about winter that scares us...maybe it is death...maybe this hints of the change of human seasons, of life's seasons....

    the photograph maybe all that is left of us when we go to our winter and get covered by the snow...

    they yellow leaf that was once green and in the spring then summer of its life....turns so beautiful at the end...sort of like how we appreciate others who have grown older, just before their end...or maybe someone close who gets badly sick...

    we appreciate the leaf when we know it is about to die.

    another enticing piece by you...little bits that create a whole image...and it works.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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