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    dots Submission Name: wrestling the winddots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotswrestling the winddots
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    another stream of melted snow,
    covering frontiers of everlasting anarchy,
    a mellow of soul reversing norms

    ships carrying the shore of sweet malady
    the longest year reflects wrinkles on skin
    undeniably too old for pulling the moon,


    and was I a fool to keep this lonely heart on my palm?



    It was meant to hold the globe.




    Submitted on 2012-09-25 00:39:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The snow in Jungle melts
    so slow. It is very special snow
    I'll have you know.

    This is a very good line

    (a mellow of soul reversing norms)

    I think that if English was your first
    language you would not come up with
    such fresh and original lines.

    In fact if you ever really manage
    to reprogram your brain to say
    USA standard your poetry may
    be the worse for it.

    (undeniably too old for pulling the moon,)

    O' ye of little faith I have a very big
    truck for pulling things. In other words
    Old barely slows some of us down.

    Wrestling the wind




    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      this almost feels like a sister poem to the other..

    the wrinkled skin...the malady...the disease, or even disease of aging....

    we sometimes love selfishly...want someone all to ourselves...and in some ways we hold that person back...that person who was meant for much more...

    could be like the butterfly...and that saying..."if you love something set it free/ if it is meant to come back to you, it will"

    and the wind is much stronger than we.

    it is.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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