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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots

    Author: mimis043
    Elite Ratio:    1.46 - 18/18/19
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       This is a story about someone that I cared about. very much. Later I found that as he told me his story. He was gone. My feelings, my heart.

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    It happened a long time ago
    when I let down my guard;
    It was raining that night
    as we talked we drank our
    Separate glasses of liquid
    Courage savoring each drop.

    My face got warm, red,
    I felt vulnerable; I looked down into the golden
    Swirls of wine;
    I look across at him ; he's so
    Hard to read...i want to reach out to feel
    If he's really there.

    We go to his cobalt colored car, pristine
    As it glistened in the dark.
    It was pouring as we walked to the car
    He came to my side and opened the door;
    I lightly brushed his hand as he
    Walked past me.

    We sat listening to the music of the rain as it poured
    Buckets of cold, cool water which filled the empty, dark
    parking lot.

    He looked at me and turned my face, a touch
    That was so tender and sweet it filled the car
    With him. I could smell his cologne, clean, crisp,
    Masculine. He looked at me , smiling and staring at me with a tentativeness filled with a delicious tension...

    Ah, but that was so long ago. Now there are
    No nights filled with such tenderness,
    Intimate moments when time stood still.
    I could almost hold that moment in my hand
    And savor its innocence and purity.
    It is now lost as I have lost my will to try again.

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      I'm sorry that this happened to you but whether we like it or not, there comes a time when love will really hurt
    I hope you can get over this..I know it won't be that easy but that doesn't mean it can't be done..I also hope that you don't lose the will to try again..never lose that..there's always hope and love will always find its way to you..in any form
    | Posted on 2012-09-28 00:00:00 | by irrelevantme | [ Reply to This ]

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