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    dots Submission Name: Night Realmdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsNight Realmdots
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    I close my eyes and leap
    into pools of liquid sleep.
    There in the twilight realm
    I release the helm.
    Joining my troubled soul, I weep.

    I journey down
    far beyond the reach of the midnight-star's
    winking, baleful eye. Softly I sigh.

    For awhile I sit with loneliness.
    I listen to his mournful memories
    share a few tender tears and reminisce.
    A tide of grief sweeps over us.

    I am born along into fathomless depths
    where deep darkness lies.

    I slumber for a time with sorrow
    an old friend of mine.
    But my interlude with sorrow is fleeting
    and further do I fall.
    I am of course seeking peace of mind.
    I know it is only in true blackness
    that I may find...
    huddled by itself
    sobbing quietly
    pining for love

    my heart.

    In tearful turmoil comes a vision
    of twinkling eyes and playful smile.

    Standing upon the precipice of desolation
    I turn and flee.
    I run into eternity and there
    in desperation I knock on death's door.

    "Patience, says he to me.
    It is not yet to be. However soon for the time
    for love draws near then you will have no need
    to find solace here.

    Once more I awake and stare
    with shadowed brow,
    somewhat comforted knowing
    the time draws near.













    Submitted on 2012-09-29 00:27:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This actually gave me palpitations as I read this Dale.. Amazing.

    Softly I sigh.

    For awhile I sit with loneliness.
    I listen to his mournful memories
    share a few tender tears and reminisce.
    A tide of grief sweeps over us.

    I am born along into fathomless depths
    where deep darkness lies.

    I slumber for a time with sorrow
    an old friend of mine.
    But my interlude with sorrow is fleeting
    and further do I fall.
    I am of course seeking peace of mind.
    I know it is only in true blackness
    that I may find...
    huddled by itself
    sobbing quietly
    pining for love

    my heart.

    Yes.. This is.. Me.. I love when I read someone and can actually see me. It lets me know I'm not alone.
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an outstanding way of starting the poem,it holds it together.
    "I close my eyes and leap
    into pools of liquid sleep
    there in the twilight realm
    I release the helm."
    I really like these lines, losing control and sinking to nights of imagining. This is what I saw.
    "I am of course seeking peace of mind. I know it is only in true blackness that I may find."
    ..this is probably the saddest part.

    "However soon the time for love..." much better I think.
    love the repitition of "draws near",there is anticipation, waiting and hope that it will come. It turned the poem around.

    ...it will come;-)

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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