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    dots Submission Name: The Dreamdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 548
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    dots The Dreamdots
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    A haribon soars on shimmering dreams
    teaching emerald passion to dance
    within the violet vault of swirling breeze

    She whirls the world
    upside 'round
    A luminous shadow
    born of jungle
    freed by flight
    She heard the call of light
    before the fall
    of
    a
    man.

    Steeped in grace
    she faces
    the
    fearful frowns

    Haughty in glimmer crown
    Her flighty feathers
    preen
    for all to see
    She is the scene.

    Tied to the heavens that gave her birth
    She yearns for more
    of the freedom she adores

    She wonders in her heart how the game is scored
    What really counts and what is just.... ignored

    All I can say is when I see her
    something wondrous comes over me
    I feel a need for
    purring words penned down

    I can't tell if the sky is up or
    inverted spinning 'round
    With wings outspread she soars

    She's a devil with the light-brigade
    on a golden chain
    Her ballroom is the sky

    O' lace the clouds
    with honey cream
    until
                    I
                   scream

    Lost In The Dream







    Submitted on 2012-09-29 01:15:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Of a forest primeval" this made me laugh. This just gave me a clear idea.
    "She wonders in her heart how the game is scored.
    What really counts and what is just..ignored" so lovely Dale. Perhaps, she will never know.
    Very nice.
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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