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    dots Submission Name: the dead moon of lovedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 385
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    dotsthe dead moon of lovedots
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    The dead moon bakes
    in hellish haze
    and mocks a naked sun.

    Torrid flights of fancy melt and run.
    Pools reflect eyes
    fear
    spears the night.

    Frenzied wolves howl in feral glee.
    Skittering bats,
    weave a black mass
    subduing
    in its majesty.

    The priestess of sin yet unborn
    sprinkles
    the
    essence
    of our hearts desire
    upon the fire.

    Cackling a lovers tune
    she sows unholy needs.

    Through shadows cast in the arbor of love
    she calls come hither come slither to me.

    Our hearts palpitate
    fueled by red
    fed by desire.
    Under the spell
    we swing in writhing tempest
    Two doomed lovers
    we are the
    feast.

    Oh fare-thee-well this misadventure.
    inflamed and giddy
    coddled by the devils own needs.
    The moon goes nova a beast released.
    We
    flare to hot to touch
    spiraling in to drink to much.
    Until finely gliding free
    with new found ease
    delectable sweetness.

    We are left cross-eyed in wonder.
    ravaged and worn
    undone.
    Fallen prey to reflected ray
    speared
    by the dead moon of love.




    Submitted on 2012-09-29 01:45:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Gee Dale, we can't even have a mutual chaos of misadventure without being skewered by our own creations, what a kill joy.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-10-01 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Splendid!
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by orangesunset | [ Reply to This ]


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