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    dots Submission Name: red lightdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsred lightdots
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    streets shred fast, side by side
    shared a strip of you to me.

    Oh words, like horse-drawn chariots,
    a tread of the mind.

    Stars were struck
    lost half of their light
    so as mine.
    tripping,
    a stampede of the heart,
    and I don't mind,
    I will trip,
    and trip
    once more,
    to get back to you.

    Now, stuck in a pedestrian lane,
    pressing those lines,
    a parity of left
    and
    right,
    I am in between intersections,
    impassable,
    I'm reading YOU,
    the light turned green,
    But I didn't go.





    Submitted on 2012-09-29 02:48:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If only I could have this kind of effect on
    a women. To have words just trip from my
    pen and then trip up her heart. To the point she
    stutter-steps wow! Well this is a lovely
    poem. Sorry about the light.





    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      "i'm in between intersections..."i'm reading you/ the light turned green/ but i didn't go"


    i can't get you out of my head or my mind...

    as much as i realize we were a short drive...and i can't seem to make a u-turn back to you...

    you dropped me, dropped me off and now i'm walking in the pedestrian lane...about to be run over by memories of you, and regrets that i can't get this damn car in reverse.

    someone is honking...can't walk down the street without a "title"---
    | Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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