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    dots Submission Name: The Kissdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Kissdots
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    I am dipped in a warm sea of melted butter
    and devoured.
    I am the flavor of all you have done to me.
    Drawn of essence
    served on silver
    I pass across your painted lips
    seared by tongue
    pushed beyond the veil.

    The descent of ever-night.
    A soul's piercing gaze.
    Molten
    The fury bursting free
    liberates
    hearts from chaos-chest.

    Torn between
          quests
    more fire
    or final release.

    To end cuddled and spent on
    moonlit sands.




    Submitted on 2012-09-29 02:55:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, that must have been some kiss!

    The first part actually could be about how the lobster feels, you know dipped in butter, served on a silver plate...yummy.

    I really think you need to change the title, the kiss is much too ordinary sounding in light of what follows.
    | Posted on 2012-10-23 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      "I am the flavor of all you have done to me" my favorite line.

    "moonlit sands" here goes the moon again.;-) when the light of the moon reflects on a clear white sand it seems as it turns to silvering dusts. It glimmers and its just a lovely scene. In the morning, sand is just what it is but in the full moon it is something else.
    I was sent to another place while reading this.


    | Posted on 2012-09-30 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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