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Evening


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 139 /256 /171
Words: 13
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Evening



Small autumn cities
tender smell of leaves
as the dusk drops.





Submitted on 2012-09-29 11:33:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Just a pause that refreshes.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2012-10-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  in cities there are few trees, in a small city even less, thus the tender smell..

and also tender in the sense that cities can be harsh--bustling, concrete, indifferent...as was NY where i came from...yet there was always that smell of New England maples in fall that sifted into the city air.

and strongest at night when everything is still...

love these short pieces, the almost haiku...

jacob
| Posted on 2012-09-29 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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