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    dots Submission Name: Churchdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsChurchdots
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    Rush hour: sunlit
    Heads shift halos
    In the specks of dust.




    Submitted on 2012-09-29 12:04:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This paints a big picture in just three lines here. Everytime I go to church I felt this goodness within and the people around me seems very peaceful and welcoming. But after the Mass, the devil took the halo and I'm back to my old self as if nothing worthwhile just happened.

    This one works well, had some deep realizations for the reader. Good job

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-10-02 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2012-10-02 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess I shift mine a little on the increasingly rare occasions I show up at a church. ;)

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2012-10-01 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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