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    dots Submission Name: Lostdots
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    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       This is how I feel here in Japan.


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    dotsLostdots
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    I'm lost and incapable
    I question my every action
    In Japan and un-relatable
    I can't find any satisfaction

    My words fall on eyes not ears
    My gaze on lips and not eyes
    I analyze thoroughly the words I hear
    Yet the answer is always a surprise

    I'm powerful, but nothing changes
    I'm intelligent, but very lost
    Sometimes our hubris is what hangs us
    Lost not finding what we sought

    The logic escapes me
    The balance has me shaken
    So many hearts I can't see
    So perhaps I was mistaken

    Each night I get a visitor
    Despair provides me company
    I wish for what once were
    Knowing it will never come to me

    I don't know what to do
    I don't want to be here
    Yet I stay here in truth
    For a promise I hold dear

    I am lost and incapable
    Yet you believed in me
    I am lost and incapable.....




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      I can imagine being dropped into an unfamiliar country with diametrically opposed customs is difficult, even if you are familiar with the language. I have visited several European countries, but it was only a visit and not long enough to really immerse in the culture. This was written with a lot of strong voice, and your despair comes through loud and clear without turning off the reader. That is because you still have the aura of strength running through the voice. I will have to read more and hope you start posting more.
    ~jan
    | Posted on 2015-04-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of how it feels to have lost part of yourself. It seems you had that special someone in your life that cared about you and believed in you but you didn't believe in yourself. That is one of the most hardest feelings to deal with. The imagery you gave throughout this entire piece was simple perfection
    | Posted on 2012-10-12 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is a very powerful poem. You captured what it is like to be lost. Are u lost to yourself or someone else?
    | Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by mimis043 | [ Reply to This ]


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