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    dots Submission Name: 300 steps to Heavendots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Misc/Religious
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    dots300 steps to Heavendots
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    before the crack of dawn,
    just before first light

    I wake at the sight of darkness
    consuming,
    suffocating;
    trapped in sins
    I swam, coast to coast
    sweet release as,
    sometimes I choke,
    drank what I swam;
    provoked

    there is someone beside me,
    I feel it;
    the warmth in the cold,
    can't see it;
    too dark

    flinched at the small light from my phone,
    eyes hardly adjusting
    I arose, changed, went out
    searching for
    i-don't-know-what's

    the cold dawn air
    piercing to the core
    of a fragile being
    lost in the graying darkness

    ended at the foot
    of steps, 300 or more
    a stairway of devotion
    to the Blessed Virgin

    exercise and devotion
    hitting two birds with one stone
    why not?
    I thought
    then took the first few

    the longer it took,
    the heavier I got
    huffed
    smoke formed from my lips
    weird
    that doesn't happen here

    heavier and heavier,
    lighter and lighter,
    windblown, I was carried away
    a release beyond words
    so sweetly whispering as I reached the top

    nice to know that the world
    could be so peaceful
    for a few hours
    before it rots

    bought a candle
    with small change and small talk
    lit with a fresh, blazing heart
    finding no cold now

    I pray,
    with kindling soul
    and heart,
    as the fire burns out





    Submitted on 2012-09-30 08:38:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You really got the sublime feel running.
    | Posted on 2012-10-03 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]
      This one I can truly relate to, I suddenly miss this experience. This is well-written, depicts the true story of devotion on what we Catholics do for our faith.
    A snapshot, a lovely one.
    | Posted on 2012-09-30 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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