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    dots Submission Name: the treedots

    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe treedots

    I am with a lonely tree,
    stunned with the silence,
    the night lends.
    when all seems asleep,
    we wait in lurking doubt,
    as we sing with echoes,
    of some distant call.

    shadows were stepping closer,
    slowly like a maiden of the night,
    I was so scared,
    I almost run,
    But the leaves just chant it all away,
    its arms stay strong.

    So,I stayed for an hour or two,
    the words never get there,
    but the wavelength of its soul
    and my heart,
    met there.

    Submitted on 2012-09-30 11:31:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Liked it. It has got an intense feel. Good!
    | Posted on 2012-10-03 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe this is not a real review but since I was moved to write it while reading this It will have to do

    Transported through ethereal space
    by unknown enchantments I
    stand in silent awe
    beside my maiden of the moon.
    Entangled souls it seems
    are destined to wander eternity
    upon the same quest.

    We are as we have always known
    possessed of the one heart.
    A heart that thumps
    in rhythm to detonating stars
    as our eyes grow wide
    in wonder
    are the revelation
    of creation

    So I stood there for a
    moment or
    was it forever?
    is time measured
    when harmony meets
    to complete
    the other half of your
    | Posted on 2012-09-30 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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