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    dots Submission Name: Could I Keep Youdots
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    Author: MmR
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 468/442/138
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       How I wish the loveliness of the moon could be mine alone


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    dotsCould I Keep Youdots
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    Could I keep you forever
    If I offered unto your glistening skies
    My single tattered heart
    Nestled lovingly within the depths
    Of a hundred million silent cries?
    Would you dedicate yourself to only me
    As so willingly I gave myself to your shimmer smile 
    While stretching this life's worth of hopes and loss 
    Beyond our miles of miles?

    Could I keep you forever
    If I whispered sweet everything's of my pain
    exposing a shadow of this yearning soul
    That could blanket the road to the highest heavens
    While these fading lights bleed blood red rain?
    Would you sob your hymns of lonesome love
    As night after damning night I praise unto you
    While pleading for a hundred million ways
    To undo the things I can't undo?

    Oh my lovely silver moon,
    How I do wish I could keep you forever.. 




    Submitted on 2012-09-30 21:04:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In order for this to be a viable option one has
    to conclude that your heart is a very tasty morsel.
    After all it is as you say tattered. I have been led
    to believe that normally pristine hearts are the more
    valued.
    Therefore my assumption is you must be part
    fey. This means it is your fairy blood that is so enticing.
    So enticing a treat in fact of fancy
    that even the moon
    will be unable to resist your heart-
    felt offer.

    | Posted on 2012-10-06 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the intensity on this one,the longing as well.
    .."dedicate yourself only to me".

    I always love poems about the moon. This is one of those I really liked.
    Good job here
    | Posted on 2012-10-02 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      i remember a kitten that followed me home when i was in 7th grade...that cat lived to be 21 years old...

    my mom said i probably had it under my jacket...truth was the only time i actually picked it up was to cross the highway because it tried to follow me and i didn't want it hit by a car.

    maybe with the moon---it might be wise to put it in your pocket...
    can always claim it followed you home...might be able to keep it as your own then.

    nice write

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-09-30 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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